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I changed For You by ~bite06me:iconbite06me:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Old Poetry Structure > Emotional




Sometimes I dont know what to say
Somtimes, I'll admit, i dont know what to do
I've lost myself in pages
Lost myself for you

These eyes aren't suppose to be black
At one point they were green, see?
My skirt once white turned to Grey
Look what you've done to me

It's not my clothes that changed the most
Neither is my eyes
My heart and mind you've tortured
Placed through pain and lies

Running in deep circles
Flying back to a cave
Ready to go diving in
I'm too lost- I've become your slave

Licking you up, whenever
I've become this whore- its my gift
But you aren't thankful for it at all
I see now that you're beginning to drift

Now with you gone,
I'm left in dust- replaced
An old ragdoll just tossed away
My seems beginning to be unlaced

Falling apart in this rubage
Surrounding all of me
Now all I can think of is
Why couldn't I see?
©2004-2009 ~bite06me
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Author's Comments

I liked this one, but never got to much attention, so I'm resubmitting it.

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=Sweetheart-Hikari Feb 7, 2004, 10:28:48 AM
:clap: I like the use of rhyme in this poem and the flow of the poem is really good. It really really well done Holly :)

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~Caboose: I don't want to be dead, I want to be alive! ... or a cowboy!~
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~ares1013 Feb 7, 2004, 12:45:02 PM
It has a song-like flow excellent piece of poetry right here. I can see why you like it so much.
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~inpayne Feb 7, 2004, 9:34:12 PM
Very nice. Emotional. I really like this one.
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~bite06me Feb 7, 2004, 9:40:22 PM
thank you =) =)

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the sky is falling
the sky is falling
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~danceman Feb 8, 2004, 4:47:02 PM
at first you see beauty when it then it transforms into something that doesnt want you but you cant let go it haunts you, leaves ya broken and most imporantly in the end alone.

indeed an emotional but also a great read :nod:

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Clatto Verata N... Necktie... Neckturn... Nickel... It's an "N" word, it's definitely an "N" word! Clatto... Verata... N--- *cough* Okay... that's it!
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~hollybunny Feb 8, 2004, 5:58:31 PM
this is beautifully written and flows with such deep emotions and images. i can totally associate with this. i am glad you resubmitted this. a definite fav :=fav; and from the heart.
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~itsonlyinmymind Feb 9, 2004, 5:34:49 PM
really good imagery, and well written, good job :)
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~headbanger1369 Feb 11, 2004, 3:40:06 PM
i like that it's good
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~bite06me Feb 11, 2004, 3:53:23 PM
=) thanks =)

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the sky is falling
the sky is falling
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